Light of my life!
8th February 08 3:39 to 3:57 am
This dark and dainty life of mine
lights up like the moon
when you come and wipe off all the gloom.
You always go and find my smile
when ive lost it in the woods
near the bushes of fear
or the lake of uncertainty,
by the creek of sadness
or by the stream of tears.
You bring hope and meaning
along with my smile
no matter you've to tread
how many a mile.
You're the best thing to have happened to me
and I will treasure you till the end of my time.
I know its pretty rough but i couldn't improve much in my sleep, lemme know what you think.
Image credits: deviantART
This dark and dainty life of mine
lights up like the moon
when you come and wipe off all the gloom.
You always go and find my smile
when ive lost it in the woods
near the bushes of fear
or the lake of uncertainty,
by the creek of sadness
or by the stream of tears.
You bring hope and meaning
along with my smile
no matter you've to tread
how many a mile.
You're the best thing to have happened to me
and I will treasure you till the end of my time.
I know its pretty rough but i couldn't improve much in my sleep, lemme know what you think.
Image credits: deviantART
Comments
srsly??...coming from u i'd say thanks for the lovely compliment.
@bonnie
:-* ...
Should I say more....u alwys do this..outstanding... >:D< :-*
What do I say now ? Famous poetess in the making ?
Beautiful.. I need to learn some from you.
outstanding!!?
omg thats too much praise
:-* >:D<
@solitaire
i meant sentence formation, rhyme scheme etc...its hardly a poem thats why plus i wanted to make it longer but neend mein aur kuch soojha nahi...
ty
look who's talkin u need to learn from me??
im honored!!
thanks dear :)
Btw,you wanted to know more about Haiku na.Here :
http://desiduck.blogspot.com/2007/11/my-first-haiku.html
thank u thank u :)
Hugs to u as well !
I'm just chkin the haiku link.
Simply beautiful poem :)
Take care, mam!
and i have 4 words
"thank you so much" :)
thanks dear...i love it when u call me that :)
*bows* :)
how sweet of you for dedicating such a beautiful poem for that light of ur life :)
love
thanks sweetie
@divvi
i know somethings definitely wrong with blogrolling, mere saath bhi yehi panga tha !
glad u liked the poem...
love and hugs
A thought applied poem...afterall who do we have here noneothere than our swety wipro vandz,,...
vaise main bhi sote sote comment likh raha hoon...so lemme also know how it is...hehe
and yeah thanks a lot for givin me a very valuable advice in the last post... you remembered me while writing the post... :) i will be there sure to follow it... was busy like hell to reply earlier.
so long the date i mentioned was my first company date....ciao soon vandz!!
*smiles* ty
@zahid
hahaa sote sote comment likha hai tune? bahut hi accha hai :)
*smiles* @ "thought applied" poem!
and yes i remembered u while writin the last post, tujhe kaise bhool sakti hoon zahid? ...
accha 26th mar first company date hai? kaunsi company aa rahi hai sabse pehle??
all the best abhi se...i'm sure get into the best place :)
take care and cya soon!
nice one.. liked it..its such a good feeling when you have some1 in ur life, some1 to be with you, some1 who could make u smile, some1 whom u can make smile....
shit shit shit!!!! i miss it a lot ...
bt thanks to you all.. the great blogger friends... thanks vands..
keep blogging... sahi likha hai really.. and if that was in a semi-conscious state of sleep, well.. then m speechless :)
waise thodi bahut poems main bhi likh leta hoon:
http://shootingstar-oxymoron.blogspot.com/search/label/Poems
lemme know wht u think abt these ones :)
-R
oh thanks a ton...and the "you" that i referred to...well its not just one person, this poem was for a group of ppl, im thankful for having all of em in my life...though there is a special "you" that tops that list :)
awww rohit, u'll get someone soon enough too...and i know its a nice feelin but my situation is not all that rosy so... chalta hai
i dunno why u thanked me...but ure more than welcome, jiske liye bhi tha
and mujhe label search karne ki zaroorat nahi hai...detailed comments baad mein kabhi dungi but just so u know i finished readin ur entire blog today...all 50 posts, nahi 2 nahi padhi...48 posts of urs !
but m all crap
u r really a wordsmith i too wrote on the same topic
but i got crummbled under my own thoughts
neways gr8 work
keep rhyming
thank u so much for callin me a wordsmith, i didn't think my poem had any rhyme scheme and ure sayin its gr8 ?:D
thanks for dropping by...
really appreciate it :)
@mav
haanji apni hi neend ki baat kar rahi hoon :P
oh tcs... cool
and my college is called "Amity School of Engg. and Technology"...our annual tech/cultural fest is called AMITECH
loved it :)
you're right, thanks sweets :)
all smiles
am glad u connected and i could convey the thought :), that was the intention
thanks for droppin by ...
Good job.
LIke the whole flow and the trip thru till the streams.
Keep it rollin;)
thank you so much :)...
the trip is my fav part too!