make sense?

"the song that makes me cry
you who makes me smile
the rain that reminds me of u
the drops i feel go within me
my heart that beats harder
whenever i hear your voice
wishin each day for ur happiness
and in turn mine
wishing each day for my sanity
read wishin for u by my side
i feel like i live my life with u
and theres just no other way to do it"

Just penned this down, its not a poem, not a paragraph...just some fragmented sentences...make sense?

Comments

The 'Mad' Orchid said…
:)))))))
*smiles*
Do I need to say more...perfect sense...i just keep gettin more reasons to love u sweet gal :)
Hugssssss n lodsaa love,
January 9, 2008 at 10:35 PM
IncorrigibleV said…
@cheri
:)
i dunno how u got reasons to love me from there...
but im glad u did... love u loads too sweetheart
hugs right back at ya!
January 9, 2008 at 11:01 PM
Solitaire said…
You wrote this keeping someone in mind? Lucky person!
January 9, 2008 at 11:35 PM
Lena said…
it makes perfect sense, sweets.
"and there is no other way to do it..." :)
January 9, 2008 at 11:37 PM
IncorrigibleV said…
@solitaire
yup he is :)
January 9, 2008 at 11:37 PM
IncorrigibleV said…
@lena
*big grin*
thanks sweetie
January 9, 2008 at 11:38 PM
Ravi Kapoor said…
hi there!

a warm & nice poem, buddy :o)

however...I was not able to understand the 3rd last line..

BTW, Congrats on getting a 10 year Visa (I just read it on your shoutbox!)

Cheers :o)
January 10, 2008 at 12:14 AM
maverick said…
hey..nice poem...n hmm koi hega ..eh??cool cool..congos on the visa... :)
January 10, 2008 at 12:19 AM
IncorrigibleV said…
@ravi
thanks for appreciating ravi
and abt the 3rd last line...its like
"wishing each day for my sanity
read wishin for u by my side"
meanin that i wont be sane if hes not by my side, that read is 'red' (past tense of read)
@the visa... yayie thanks a ton!

@maverick
thanks for the wishes and koi hai toh sahi...bahut duur hai!
January 10, 2008 at 12:24 AM
Ravi Kapoor said…
Okies..I got it now!!

Thanks 4 the explanation..its amazing that every time I leave a comment, your response is IMMEDIATE!

You're just like me in this field..I also make a point to immediate respond to my blog visitor's comments (thanks to my lappy, cellfone and all the other geeky gadgets!)

Take care, mam :o)
January 10, 2008 at 12:30 AM
neers said…
Lovely. and ya that "person" is lucky ofcourse. a poem for a poet!! ;)
January 10, 2008 at 12:33 AM
IncorrigibleV said…
@ravi
lol just coincidental, i'm online 24*7 only when im at home...
u take care too :)

@bonnie
where the hell have u been... have missed u so much these 2 days
"a poem for a poet!"
smart...very smart and i soooo love u!
ty sweetheart
January 10, 2008 at 12:40 AM
Pri said…
mmmm ...those 'fragmented sentences' made much more sense than the longest of well thought over verses, vands...because they are penned straight from the heart :)

wonderful work!! keep writing!
January 10, 2008 at 9:55 AM
IncorrigibleV said…
@bubbles
i smiled :)

@pri
thanks so much for the words of appreciation sweets
:)
January 10, 2008 at 6:21 PM
Sameera Ansari said…
Hmmm,want to tell you your own words here dearie,

"missin someone is when u remember the times u spent with that person n want them around u...but those are happy thoughts so u shd do all the things associated with the word happy and sheddin tears is not one of em"

Yaad hai? :)

Whenever you need a shoulder,am there in my own small way.Love and hugs to you sweetie.TC

P.S. That pic is sooo cute!
January 10, 2008 at 6:54 PM
IncorrigibleV said…
@sameera
haan haan yaad hai, and those weren't my words...words of a person i trust a lot.
and i know i can always count on u guys ... thanks sweetie
love the pic too, and im supercool, all smiles:)
hugs back at ya
January 10, 2008 at 7:01 PM
Zahid said…
The decoration with those buttons was so very beautiful.....You wrote this in a diary first??? if i am not wrong.... Sweetness pays vandz.... you are very rich !!! Just stay away from ants !!!

P.S : I am angry with blogrolling coz these days it aint showing updated blogs of many of my dear dear sugar factories !!!
January 10, 2008 at 7:58 PM
IncorrigibleV said…
@zahid
hehe yeah the pic's really beautiful...maine nahi banaya hai aisa kuch, though it did give me loadsa ideas ;)
and this time ure wrong...i didnt write in a diary ... light nahi thi and it was rainin, i typed in notepad directly and published when the electricity was restored!
thanks for the sweet words zahid, makes my day
@PS. i know blogrolling is doin that to me too...and many smiles @ "sugar factories"
take care
January 10, 2008 at 8:19 PM
gypsy said…
makes a lotta sense indeed!

we pick up letters, make words...pick wrds...make lines...make them more meaninful...pick lines..make a poem or a para...

:)needless to mention...even a letter speaks a lot!:)
January 10, 2008 at 10:54 PM
IncorrigibleV said…
@neha
great!...
ure so right abt everything just actually boilin down to words...
im so glad i made sense to so many ppl :)
January 11, 2008 at 2:00 AM
Garima Sekhri said…
a lot of sense! more than a page of explanation wud make n i kinda knw where tht comes frm so im glad uve written this!love ya loads
January 12, 2008 at 10:58 PM
IncorrigibleV said…
@garu
great... am happy too :)
love u loads darlin
January 12, 2008 at 11:05 PM
Anonymous said…
This is just beautiful :)

I wish you write such jumble moer often :) it makes a whole lot of sens e:)
May 30, 2008 at 9:42 PM
Anonymous said…
P.S. Missed You :)
May 30, 2008 at 9:43 PM
IncorrigibleV said…
@Veens
:) i cant predict when i write... but whenever i do it mostly is jumble :P, glad u liked it :)
P.S. missed u too :-*
May 30, 2008 at 10:26 PM
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